A job with more vacation time but a low salary is better than a job with a high salary but less vacation time. 是否同意低薪假期多的工作比高薪假期少的工作好?(09.02.27)

　　点评：A 和 B 对比写法

　　原创经典范文赏析：

　　首段：个性开篇 + 争议焦点 + 作家立场

　　Indeed, the proportion of people’s life spent doing such jobs is very high. So feelings about one's job must mirror how an individual feels about his or her life, thus, job satisfaction is very significant for people’s happiness. One of the traits of modern way of working is that people enjoy more freedom in selecting jobs. People differ greatly in their views as to which job is more commendable, a job with less vacation time but comfortable salary, or a career with more flexible time but low pay. As I see it, both of them all have its pros and cons, yet, a job with comfortable salary deserve more praises.

　　点评：…… deserve more praises 值得更多的赞美

　　二段：第一次支持作家立场以及细节展开

　　For a start，a trend is that nowadays a great many people are often willing sacrifice freedom for the purpose of having a well-paid salary. More precisely, many people associate job satisfaction with the number on their pay cheque. They may take their salary as a symbol of how much they are valued by the organizations they work for and how excellent their performance is. Little wonder that a poll taken by China Daily found that most people believed that they could enjoy superior material comfort as well as creating good quality of life if they can take up handsomely paid jobs.

　　点评：take up = embark on 从事……

　　三段：第一次支持作家立场以及细节展开：叔叔保罗创业的故事

　　The debate reminds me of my Uncle Paul, who is an entrepreneur by embarking on self-employment. A decade ago, my uncle had a stable career, namely, a civil servant, more freedom and meager salary is the feature of his career. However, his life always felt empty and he was fed up with his former job. After careful consideration, my uncle hardened his heart to carve out his own career， currently, he lives his life to the full, he always get his hands full and have limited free time at his own disposal. However, the sense of happiness and fulfillment gradually grows on him. All these happened to prove a fact that a well-paid job is superior to a career which has a meager salary.

　　点评：His life feels empty 他感到生活很空虚。

　　点评：he lives his life to the full. 他的生活很充实。

　　四段：让步段：让步低薪自由的工作的优点+再加以反驳

　　Granted, I confess that a job with more freedom is never without its merits. An argument hold by some people is that having a long vacation can give one person a desirable way to relax and enjoy the pleasure of life. Traveling around the globe, doing what one’s heart really desires or accompanying the family members could all serve as perfect examples. Nonetheless, I want to refute that low-wage jobs also means that one falls into financial difficulties and thus fails to secure a stable life.

　　尾段：

　　In a nutshell，my standpoint is that the option of career should be given to every individual, for the aspirations of life differ greatly. However, it is an ideal option that one could struggle for economic reward even at the expense of sacrificing personal freedom.